Crystal Fulp
Cooper
CRWR 212Y
2/13/14
For the Love of Cujo
When I held
him for the first time I had no way of knowing that I would fall in love or
that it would end way too soon. I still remember the day I first held him. It
was an early spring day in March of 2011. The sun was shining brightly in a big, blue
sky. There were beautiful birds singing sweet melodies to one another. It was
the type of day that bred hope and the birth of all things precious and new. I
remember vibrating with excitement, but I also harbored a feeling of
apprehension that I couldn’t explain. At the time I discounted it, but now I
recognize it for what it was…it was a warning.
I was
sitting on the couch in our living room awaiting my father’s return from a
long, hard day of work. I knew that he was bringing home our newest family
member and I was excited to meet him. I sat with our Jack Russell Terrier and
bounced up from my seat when I heard the rumble of the truck.
I rushed
out to meet him at his truck where he presented me with a small bundle. Inside
the bundle I found the most precious thing, I found a small Chihuahua puppy
sleeping soundly. He was curled up in a ball of the ultimate cuteness. He was
white with brown spots splattered haphazardly over his body and face. I
remember thinking that he was the most precious thing that I had ever seen. I
was so mesmerized by him that I barely heard my father say, “Be careful not to
drop him. He’s very little.” I guess my father’s voice must have woken the
little puppy because at that moment he opened his big chocolate brown eyes and looked
at me. His eyes were the picture of contentment and trust. A feeling that I had
never known began surging from my chest to the rest of my body. My heart beat
rapidly and warmth enveloped me. I knew right then and there that I would love
and protect him forever. I would never let anything bad happen to him. And
neither would my family.
Later that
evening as the rest of my family met him there was nothing, but joy, excitement
and peace in our household. Our house was usually loud and raucous, but that
evening it wasn’t. It was like a calm had enveloped us all. It was a beautiful
experience and an even more beautiful memory. Before that evening was done my
father had dubbed the baby “Cujo” and I had fallen irrevocably in love.
9 comments:
Intrigued by this piece. I love some of the descriptive language you use to describe the puppy...chocolate brown eyes, haphazard spots. Like that you wrote about a memory that most all of us have had...the intro of a new pet into the family. Am completely curious about why you stated that your sense of apprehension about the new pet was unnerving and "a warning", and also why you state that the experience was way too short? My mind wanders and wants answers...did something happen to the puppy, did you move from home and have to leave him behind, what? I think the questions that your comments evoke both add to the story, and at the same time take away from it because I am all about instant gratification and want to know the whole story.
Denise Bateman
Hi Crystal,
First off, your prose is very fluid and well done, and you have a keen control of language that I most certainly appreciate.
I truly loved the juxtaposition in describing your new arrival as the "ultimate cuteness" and how precious and delicate he was, only to then him Cujo, embodying the unstoppable connotation of destructive hell hound from Stephen King's classic.
The only significant concern I have about your story is that you indicate the untimely demise of your pet, however the story never actually delivers on that aspect. I would either eliminate that note, or expand on your story.
Excellent use of description and literal language, but perhaps you can explore more figurative language in describing your feelings, your household, the puppy, and the experience.
Well done!
Prof. Cooper
Hello Crustal,
I love your use of figurative language. The way you describe your love for the dog is heart warming and immense. This allows the reader to actually understand and almost feel the love for your dog. The description of him was very nice and he seams like a very cute and adorable dog as well. Very nicely written.
Deyanira Bustos
I always enjoy reading about people's pets, and your use of language really helped me see what Cujo looked like when he was first brought home. Does that indescribable feeling still emerge now that he is a little older?
This piece was absolutely precious. I enjoyed your imagery and your depiction of your excitement as Cujo arrived at your home. I also enjoy how you struck at emotions with explaining your feelings when he looked at you and when your household felt such a peace.
This piece was very good! I really like all the details used in it. The start was very ominous but we never find out what happened to the dog. We think that the puppy will die but we never find out if he actually does or not or how he dies. I did enjoying hearing how the dog effected your family; it added more meaning to the overall piece.
--Monique Ahmad
Crystal,
Well, nothing makes me tear up faster than reading about someone's pet. I loved your description throughout the story. The imagery of the birds singing and what a beautiful day it was mirrored the excitement of getting a new puppy. I thought you had excellent alliteration ("…shining brightly in a big, blue sky.") throughout. I like your use of dialogue in just one place where it is most important to the story.
I would have liked to know what happened with your puppy, as you allude to in the beginning. You did a great job!
Crystal,
I love sharing stories about pets as they have such meaning in our lives. I really liked your use of imagery describing the day set up such a happy scene for the story. I also enjoyed your alliteration in “brightly in a big, blue sky.” It contributed to the imagery nicely. The description of Cujo as a puppy seemed to capture him perfect and I’ve never even seen him. It showed the reader that you really did remember every moment of this occasion. I was left wondering about the “warning” and whatever the bad incident was. Personally, I really don’t like when bad things happen to our pets as it makes me super sad. I felt that the foreshadowing to something bad happening didn’t add much else to the piece other than wondering, though it did make us realize just how much Cujo means to you. Great job on this! I wish I could cuddle him as a puppy, he sounds so cute.
Rebecca
Great story, for a dog lover like myself it projects how you feel when you first look into your puppies eyes. I would consider transitioning the first sentence a little differently, I understand what you mean by the feeling of its almost too good to be true so you feel like this is the beginning of the end.
Thanks for sharing
Jason Faulkner
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